The second part reads like a literal translation from English to a phrase which sounds "artificial" in Italian. A minor change could fix that.

I'd like to suggest something like this:

Esso può anche essere interpretato come un'introduzione e un riassunto comparativo tra le licenze Open Source BSD e GPL

The "vaghe" word looks really out of place, it is rarely used like that common spoken or written Italian. I'd suggest replacing it with "informali".

Another problem is the word hardware being repeated so often. While I understand the English source has the same problem, Italian language grammar really frowns on repetitions.

In the same phrase the word "compagnie" is used, but it's really a false friend for "companies", the correct translation of companies in Italian is "aziende".

To avoid some repetition it could be rendered like this:

...sviluppavano molto del software che le aziende di hardware informatico vendevano incluso nelle loro offerte[1] .

[1] the word hardware in this case can be left out, it can be inferred from context, hardware companies sell hardware anyway

I'd replace "interrompere" with "prevenire" or "impedire".

"rovinare" by itself here sounds really bad. I'd suggest "mandare in rovina" (which is a set phrase in Italian), or the while phrase could be reworded like this:

Nel 1965 il Dipartimento di Giustizia degli Stati Uniti accusò IBM di concorrenza sleale offrendo software gratuito

A personal note not on the translation but on the original content. I have read this information about the PDP-11" being inexpensive in various places. But I think it should be clearly stated that it was "relatively inexpensive" at the time.

I don't have definitive data, but from some reading on the internet in the 70s in the US a new car would cost around 6000-7000 USD, and the PDP-11 was introduced at 20.000 US, which was the cost of a small apartment. That would be very very expensive for a basic computer system by today standards!

"insegno" like could be misunderstood. I'd reword it a little:

nel 1975 ed tenne corsi sul kernel insegnandolo riga per riga

This part is not translated.

PC BSD -> BSD per PC

I'm proposing this transaltion:

A metà anni 90, la Novell comprò i diritti commerciali su Unix dalla AT&T e fu raggiunto un accordo (allora segreto) per concludere la causa. l'USB interruppe il supporto per BSD poco tempo dopo.

Lo stato attuale di FreeBSD e delle licenze BSD

From a legal standpoint the "querela" is a penal law institution, while here we're talking about civil law, so the correct phrase is "non è possibile fare causa a nessuno"

Common wording is "un oggetto di dominio pubblico"

"Casalinghi" does not look right here, while it is a literal translation of "in house". AFAIK the correct translation conveying the same meaning is "prodotti internamente".

Casalingo in Italian conveys an private home meaning with "casalinga" being a homewife caring for the house and usually not having her own job. the word "casalinghi" (plural form) is also used to mean small home appliances.

ma spesso con lo svantaggio che essi funzioneranno solo per versioni specifiche del kernel Linux.

"particolari" is the Italian translation of "peculiar", being a false friend for "particular"

il kernel Linux veniva sviluppato come un clone di Unix per PC

Not sure how to explain this in English, but to convey the idea that linux is a unix lookalike running on the PC the phrase needs to be constructed in this way.

rilasciato/a -> pubblicato/a

(as in made available to the general public)

there also a typo: mantere -> mantenere

While I agree with keeping the English term "Orphaning" maybe it could be a good idea to add a translation for that between parentheses, like (letteralmente rendere orfano".

I'd replace "compagnie" with "aziende" here too.

While this is not wrong I think it would be better like this:

La GPL tenta di impedire l'orphaning spezzando il legame con la proprietà intellettuale privata.

sparsa -> distribuita

(this is also a false friend)

lo fa più velocemente dei proprietari originali

(adverb form required here)

typo: accrese -> accresce

I Sistemi in tempo reale...

(I can't recall the exact grammatical rule, but depending in the construction of the phrase the impersonal article is required here, If I recall correctly from school it's due to "real time systems" not being the subject in an active construction, like "real time systems do this and this" but real time systems being a passive predicate begin subject to something from other active agents)

... trasferimento tecnologico ed è solitamente abbastanza difficile anche nelle migliori delle circostanze

(anche, meaning "even in" in this context, is required to convey the idea that getting the result is actually difficult "even in" the best circumstances)

Another comment not strictly related with translation or wording.

The document is quite US centric, here it lists only US insitutions.

Italy has it's own equivalents (CNR (Consiglio Nazionale delle Ricerche, National research Council) is quite similar to NSF for example). Since translating is not a simple mechanical thing but also a "cultural" operation, shouldn't we also list some Italian institutions? Also to help educating users better, perhaps on what they should expect by their own state agencies.

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al di fuori dell'azienda è un beneficio economico trasferibile

"economico" is a qualitative adjective and Italian grammar requires them to follow the word they qualify, Also there are exceptions but they don't apply here. Also sometimes the same adjective changes meaning of the phrase depending on it's position, for example "alcuni amici vecchi" means "some friends who are old people", while "alcuni vecchi amici" means "some friends I have known for a long time (whatever their age)". Italian is complicated! :)

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